ENGLISH 1102
E-PORTFOLIO
MY PROCESS - THIS I BELIEVE
For this "My Process" section, I decide to show you how I made my "This I Believe" essay. Essentially, this major writing assignment required a lot of feeling, so it's more personal than the others. As a group activity, my classmates and I had to brainstorm possible beliefs to write about; the whole class had to make lists of their top principles. Mine can be seen in a picture below. Basically, my paper went through a normal process by going through different drafts until the final one was created. Before I started, I didn't really have much to write on. I wasn't sure how personal I wanted to go, and I had trouble choosing one belief over another. As you scroll down, a few more screenshots or pictures are posted to better help you visualize the steps that I took to get to the final draft. Half of them will be from my daybook while the others will just be screenshots from the word documents. Although there's no picture for it, everyone in the class went to see Ms. Andrews, our english 1102 teacher, for a conference. During that little meeting, we further discussed what we should write about, and Ms. Andrews definitely pushed me toward writing about NBL. I felt good after talking to her because I was finally headed toward starting my paper.
Hey everyone,
Just a speech bubble right here! Just kidding, but really, this is the list of principles that I came up with during the beginning of the whole TIB process. None of them are in order; none of them have too much hierarchy over each other. After looking at this list, I went and chose to write about number three (NBL).
Not too long after the first entry, we were introduced to Bill Gates' essay entry. Then, we were given the actual assignment afterward. This picture shows a little bit more brainstorming, but I find it easier to just vaguely write key words.
Here's a screenshot of our This I Believe credos. After brainstorming all of those ideas, Ms. Andrews made us write this piece. It's not too complicated, and was basically a whole bunch of beliefs that I thought were important.
Once we finally got our assignment, we all constructed our rough draft. I struggled a lot more with writing the first paragraph since I couldn't express what I wanted to say with words. That's my number one problem in every single paper: being clear and concise with my topic.
After the rough draft, we got into groups of three and had a little editing workshop. In this picture, my two groupmates, Matt and Nicole, wrote down their general thoughts about my essay. This definitely helped me out a ton for my next draft.
Here's just the next rough draft that I had. The first paragraph went 50/50 during the peer reviews, so I couldn't tell whether or not to scrap it. I wanted to have my own voice by talking about Miley Cyrus, but she didn't stay for too long after this paper.
Here's Ms. Andrews' response to my essay. As you can see, a lot of areas needed to either be scrapped or written more clearly. I did decide to take out the first paragraph comepletely after this response because I started to feel like it truly was unnecessary.
This here is my final draft. This is the essay that I turned into both the TIB website and Ms. Andrews. The previous draft was due in late February, and this final one wasn't due until the end of April. I do think I could have edited the essay more since we had about two months to do so. However, i don't really have a way to express NBL in any other way to make the essay sound and flow more smoothly.